tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5179795275664264195.post7989337899566435667..comments2024-01-27T20:23:45.771+00:00Comments on Sulci Collective: Captivation - Friday FlashSulci Collectivehttp://www.blogger.com/profile/03293833259808943096noreply@blogger.comBlogger19125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5179795275664264195.post-85713220558410180442010-11-03T05:56:18.958+00:002010-11-03T05:56:18.958+00:00I'm late here... sorry!! But I loved this none...I'm late here... sorry!! But I loved this nonetheless...Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11413377601369107260noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5179795275664264195.post-56862017954062712002010-11-02T13:34:22.703+00:002010-11-02T13:34:22.703+00:00Mark, this piece is just outstanding! Deep and dar...Mark, this piece is just outstanding! Deep and dark and beautifully done!Harryhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09628269009060185397noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5179795275664264195.post-73131073232622129042010-10-30T18:23:11.367+01:002010-10-30T18:23:11.367+01:00Love the language and dark imagery in this. The ir...Love the language and dark imagery in this. The irony of the boy and the man. Great!Joz Varlohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12750541029227514781noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5179795275664264195.post-73619911306109570182010-10-30T17:53:29.433+01:002010-10-30T17:53:29.433+01:00A butterfly caught in a boy's hand, a prisoner...A butterfly caught in a boy's hand, a prisoner caught in a cell of bars and his own body, both at the mercy of others. A cryptic tattoo. The hypocrisy of 'drying out' a prisoner while craving a cigarette. The utter waste of killing something to hang onto it. <br />Geez, Marc, this was a real beauty.Cathy Olliffe-Websterhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12729578896443750402noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5179795275664264195.post-60194700900695494672010-10-30T03:52:50.810+01:002010-10-30T03:52:50.810+01:00Makes me wonder what happened to him. Hmmm...why ...Makes me wonder what happened to him. Hmmm...why the tattoo? I loved it.CathrynLouishttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06380932922178601607noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5179795275664264195.post-2273561735889506532010-10-30T02:57:10.568+01:002010-10-30T02:57:10.568+01:00Wonderful. Love the title, to captivate, to be cap...Wonderful. Love the title, to captivate, to be captive. The butterfly a powerful symbol. So many levels to this story.<br /><br />I have read the word 'judder' twice today, after never noting it before in my life. Peace...Lindahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01110078016784294934noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5179795275664264195.post-20239152220221354262010-10-29T21:22:25.720+01:002010-10-29T21:22:25.720+01:00Those experiences in childhood that are so meaning...Those experiences in childhood that are so meaningful, but are so hard to explain...you've captured that.Machellehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15102615100389341608noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5179795275664264195.post-76671727943944823892010-10-29T16:05:42.899+01:002010-10-29T16:05:42.899+01:00This was particularly meaningful for me because th...This was particularly meaningful for me because the serial killer in the novel I'm working on started like this, with a monarch butterfly. He, too, ended up keeping it by squishing it. Something about our human pathology when it goes wrong, equates death with holding on to that moment or object forever. <br /><br />Even when we're healthy, we want to hang on to beauty, precious moments...capturing color, form, words on canvas to live forever. <br /><br />Anyway, love the way you unfolded this character for us as a child and a strung out adult. It created empathy instead of pity.shannonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17063218369150683990noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5179795275664264195.post-45499213138531249882010-10-29T14:50:14.351+01:002010-10-29T14:50:14.351+01:00Psychological without heaviness. You drew the para...Psychological without heaviness. You drew the parallels between man and butterfly with great subtlty. Well done, as always.Lauritahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03688820247531607677noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5179795275664264195.post-62217660276868455062010-10-29T14:37:27.579+01:002010-10-29T14:37:27.579+01:00First of all, this is brilliant: "One clock i...First of all, this is brilliant: "One clock is mounted on the wall. The other inside every cell of the man's body."<br /><br />But the ending is so perfect, suggestive and draws it all together so well, I like it best of everything. It tells such a story behind the words. Very well done.Jenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01425418200940737247noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5179795275664264195.post-84968885535608008842010-10-29T14:35:18.962+01:002010-10-29T14:35:18.962+01:00Nice work this. Butterflies don't usually fit...Nice work this. Butterflies don't usually fit in with men.Carrie Clevengerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05093923008179106837noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5179795275664264195.post-27952287408177885472010-10-29T14:06:49.112+01:002010-10-29T14:06:49.112+01:00A dark, psychological piece, sort of suffocating. ...A dark, psychological piece, sort of suffocating. Excellent.Laura Enohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09982794146667832204noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5179795275664264195.post-55942622650116998352010-10-29T13:42:33.313+01:002010-10-29T13:42:33.313+01:00A beautiful, poignant piece. Stunning.A beautiful, poignant piece. Stunning.Samhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00361651251233078437noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5179795275664264195.post-8414525916244743802010-10-29T13:33:32.857+01:002010-10-29T13:33:32.857+01:00Deeply sensual, even when the sensations are unple...Deeply sensual, even when the sensations are unpleasant. Great writing.Tony Nolandhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15090583562737225942noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5179795275664264195.post-63284519516338711352010-10-29T09:38:47.119+01:002010-10-29T09:38:47.119+01:00Captivation, yes a really great title. In particul...Captivation, yes a really great title. In particular what I liked about this was how the juddering and the feeling of butterflies closed inside the palm represented an elusive more benign life of his youth now lost but still (trapped?) inside. Outward shudderings as the reverbations of old. Not so much the talk therapy and Freudian assumption of childhood hangups being th precursor of later addictions but the sensitive personality always easily swayed, moved, done for by something as subtle as a butterfly wing.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5179795275664264195.post-15384108798048253382010-10-29T09:07:08.723+01:002010-10-29T09:07:08.723+01:00One of the more intelligent psychological pieces I...One of the more intelligent psychological pieces I've read in some time Marc. I love this! <br /><br />This line: "Like a shambling punch-drunk boxer." is a spot on perfect description. <br /><br />Bravo!Deanna Schrayerhttp://www.theothersideofdeanna.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5179795275664264195.post-63480245274150416792010-10-29T03:38:35.626+01:002010-10-29T03:38:35.626+01:00This made me almost claustrophobic. Deep stuff and...This made me almost claustrophobic. Deep stuff and sufficiently dark to be perfect for the halloween weekend.Genevieve Jackhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16178276724159826428noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5179795275664264195.post-5552188474613587072010-10-29T01:04:25.951+01:002010-10-29T01:04:25.951+01:00Painful and poignant ... the man was as much a pri...Painful and poignant ... the man was as much a prisoner as the butterfly he had trapped in his hand as a boy.Janet Lingel Aldrichhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05633969913976791146noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5179795275664264195.post-30171171007417950182010-10-29T00:29:49.801+01:002010-10-29T00:29:49.801+01:00Ah, the boy is the father to the man.
So many qui...Ah, the boy is the father to the man.<br /><br />So many quite wonderful parts. Butterfly "Shut it up in a prison of darkness inside his hand."<br /><br />Man is shut up in a prison of darkness inside his body.<br /><br />Judder is a new favorite word.<br /><br />P.S. My father, who was a merchant seaman - had a small tattoo of a butterfly on his left arm. It wasn't squashed.Marisa Birnshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17945909737147497606noreply@blogger.com