tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5179795275664264195.post5014567366555958040..comments2024-01-27T20:23:45.771+00:00Comments on Sulci Collective: Hard Time - Friday FlashSulci Collectivehttp://www.blogger.com/profile/03293833259808943096noreply@blogger.comBlogger26125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5179795275664264195.post-41817345303032521612010-05-31T15:29:52.610+01:002010-05-31T15:29:52.610+01:00Ooo, the dangerous predator.
I liked the descript...Ooo, the dangerous predator.<br /><br />I liked the descriptions of how each type of mental illness finds their own freedom through sleep - so interesting!<br /><br />This really had the sharp edge and voice of the MC. Excellent!Anne Tyler Lordhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16909141266966569378noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5179795275664264195.post-52843099926812788272010-05-31T14:47:29.823+01:002010-05-31T14:47:29.823+01:00Wicked Marc! The layers are outstanding. A nice sp...Wicked Marc! The layers are outstanding. A nice splinter of doing time. And the alpha inside maybe. At least in his own mind.Carrie Clevengerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05093923008179106837noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5179795275664264195.post-10343649941564857042010-05-31T13:52:39.550+01:002010-05-31T13:52:39.550+01:00One of my favorites Marc. Your ability to weave ju...One of my favorites Marc. Your ability to weave just the right words into a palpable atmosphere astounds me. Bravo!Deanna Schrayerhttp://theothersideofdeanna.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5179795275664264195.post-1944832880087337502010-05-29T23:42:15.580+01:002010-05-29T23:42:15.580+01:00Very cool story. Dark and edgy. Nicely done!Very cool story. Dark and edgy. Nicely done!Eric J. Krausehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05774468607814244185noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5179795275664264195.post-39678976118126296882010-05-29T23:21:34.046+01:002010-05-29T23:21:34.046+01:00"Those superficially at peace, still subconsc..."Those superficially at peace, still subconsciously suck their thumbs." - I particularly like that whole paragraph. Sometimes I think a person is only free in their own mind. For the incarcerated this must be so.Mark Kerstetterhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13307987573435067415noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5179795275664264195.post-26542375433682839682010-05-29T18:20:30.728+01:002010-05-29T18:20:30.728+01:00What a way you have with language. Just gorgeous. ...What a way you have with language. Just gorgeous. And the layers here-- it would take anyone else 50 pages to portray what you have in this flash. Someone should pay you for this piece.<br /><br />Utterly outstanding.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5179795275664264195.post-51306450363099787562010-05-29T17:45:33.282+01:002010-05-29T17:45:33.282+01:00Love how your portray how sleep exposes the human ...Love how your portray how sleep exposes the human vulnerability of even the most superficially 'hard' characters - the thumb sucking image was very effective and the closing line leaves the reader teasingly hanging.Heather Woodhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07286242856875771933noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5179795275664264195.post-19309899594399474642010-05-29T15:49:13.556+01:002010-05-29T15:49:13.556+01:00Very dark, yet philosophical. Hard to imagine you...Very dark, yet philosophical. Hard to imagine you've never inhabited this man's skin - you've rendered his world beautifully.PJhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07521953491880916840noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5179795275664264195.post-66133690126536795702010-05-29T11:09:39.292+01:002010-05-29T11:09:39.292+01:00Strange to think of such a hard place as being sof...Strange to think of such a hard place as being soft and introspective as night closes in.Tony Nolandhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15090583562737225942noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5179795275664264195.post-10750777751714460622010-05-29T05:24:28.329+01:002010-05-29T05:24:28.329+01:00I had to go look up words as I was reading the sto...I had to go look up words as I was reading the story which is both good and bad. Bad because I feel my vocab needs work and it took me out of the story a bit, but good because I learned something. <br /><br />I did enjoy the rhythm of words and the final predatory line at the end. Nice.Cat Russellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14160039271069426174noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5179795275664264195.post-345076151496178462010-05-29T04:16:31.067+01:002010-05-29T04:16:31.067+01:00You did a great job setting the tone. I love the ...You did a great job setting the tone. I love the line about pacing his cell from the confinement of his bed, but, like amharte.com, I got lost in the language.Danielle La Pagliahttp://daniellelapaglia.wordpress.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5179795275664264195.post-38376252631080327562010-05-29T00:32:11.220+01:002010-05-29T00:32:11.220+01:00Wow, freaky. I actually work in sleep and think y...Wow, freaky. I actually work in sleep and think you nailed the descriptions and all the things people do to get there. Your predator is quite creepy mentally pacing his cell.<br /><br />CDCecilia Dominichttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12799727636246434837noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5179795275664264195.post-58154514797701240182010-05-28T18:16:25.527+01:002010-05-28T18:16:25.527+01:00At a loss for words to discuss this kennel full of...At a loss for words to discuss this kennel full of wounded and wounders.<br />Wonderful writing.Karen from Mentorhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03685540761526680384noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5179795275664264195.post-17577646590360484722010-05-28T13:39:42.106+01:002010-05-28T13:39:42.106+01:00Dark and dangerous. You wring emotions with your w...Dark and dangerous. You wring emotions with your words. Fabulous!Laura Enohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09982794146667832204noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5179795275664264195.post-20178604251248769822010-05-28T13:36:08.633+01:002010-05-28T13:36:08.633+01:00I like reading your story first on Fridays because...I like reading your story first on Fridays because it always presents me with such an amazing picture I want to give it its space. This is one of my favourites. I got the picture, the situation, long before you made it totally obviously. Very well done.Jenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01425418200940737247noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5179795275664264195.post-61724007130116960332010-05-28T13:29:57.653+01:002010-05-28T13:29:57.653+01:00Hot.
PenHot.<br />PenAnonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01569852453530703490noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5179795275664264195.post-89819788465282084072010-05-28T10:08:50.555+01:002010-05-28T10:08:50.555+01:00Very powerful descriptions, dark and gritty and tw...Very powerful descriptions, dark and gritty and twisted, although I'm sad to say you made me feel my utter lack of vocabulary -- there were a number of words with which I was unfamiliar!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5179795275664264195.post-43899227286902782042010-05-28T08:57:13.051+01:002010-05-28T08:57:13.051+01:00Fabulously atmospheric, a world in a kernal.Fabulously atmospheric, a world in a kernal.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5179795275664264195.post-56381106068778891132010-05-28T07:08:09.304+01:002010-05-28T07:08:09.304+01:00I was thinking more of a tiger John!I was thinking more of a tiger John!Sulci Collectivehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03293833259808943096noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5179795275664264195.post-65242681690539158162010-05-28T04:34:03.774+01:002010-05-28T04:34:03.774+01:00"Except me. For I am a nocturnal animal."..."Except me. For I am a nocturnal animal."<br /><br />I knew he was a bat all along! Called it!John Wiswellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07416044628686736927noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5179795275664264195.post-38606429106177766152010-05-28T01:20:14.501+01:002010-05-28T01:20:14.501+01:00Dark. "those superficially at peace, still ne...Dark. "those superficially at peace, still need to suck their thumbs." Wow. Now I feel sorry for the psychopath. This left me with the feeling I need to go scrub in the shower.shannonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17063218369150683990noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5179795275664264195.post-71241529444126491922010-05-28T01:02:21.294+01:002010-05-28T01:02:21.294+01:00great word choices and meter, still interpreting.....great word choices and meter, still interpreting...Michael Solenderhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01120045114297450520noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5179795275664264195.post-80661471846991227022010-05-27T23:22:36.644+01:002010-05-27T23:22:36.644+01:00What a strong piece. Amazing ending.What a strong piece. Amazing ending.Thom Gabrukiewiczhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13286670695334830471noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5179795275664264195.post-81543961642634908522010-05-27T22:56:07.165+01:002010-05-27T22:56:07.165+01:00No, but in my twenties we played football on the f...No, but in my twenties we played football on the fields outside The Scrubs and the prisoners used to climb up to their windows and yell at us. But the distance was such that all you could hear was indefinable shouting.Sulci Collectivehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03293833259808943096noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5179795275664264195.post-50832799224059348142010-05-27T22:55:35.682+01:002010-05-27T22:55:35.682+01:00A daytime of escaping the predator in the jungle, ...A daytime of escaping the predator in the jungle, a nighttime of a peace of sorts.<br /><br />Cellmate, however, calls notice to himself by his in-and-out breathing, so he is no longer sleeping prisoner number whatever. He is prey.<br /><br />Amazing piece. Cicero would nod.Marisa Birnshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17945909737147497606noreply@blogger.com