tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5179795275664264195.post34035529644088861..comments2024-01-27T20:23:45.771+00:00Comments on Sulci Collective: A Life Lived In Outline - FridayFlashSulci Collectivehttp://www.blogger.com/profile/03293833259808943096noreply@blogger.comBlogger19125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5179795275664264195.post-6764374205116516032012-04-02T03:29:49.904+01:002012-04-02T03:29:49.904+01:00"Pictures or it didn't happen" -- ni..."Pictures or it didn't happen" -- nicely done.Katherine Hajerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08270232675026751342noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5179795275664264195.post-79842534760077310682012-04-01T21:25:30.370+01:002012-04-01T21:25:30.370+01:00Great descriptive language and the emotions you pa...Great descriptive language and the emotions you packed into this piece - great workAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5179795275664264195.post-82872116628829071092012-04-01T11:17:03.813+01:002012-04-01T11:17:03.813+01:00I don't think I can add any superlatives to th...I don't think I can add any superlatives to those mentioned above, Marc.<br /><br />Beautiful, emotive stuff. Nice work.Jack Holthttp://jackkholt.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5179795275664264195.post-61717295768643327382012-03-31T13:03:13.639+01:002012-03-31T13:03:13.639+01:00A brilliant piece of writing. Very well crafted.
...A brilliant piece of writing. Very well crafted.<br /><br />There is plenty of emotion running through this, and I like the way you have likened his existence to the lines and drawings.<br /><br />I enjoyed every word of this story.Steve Greenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18414279461366098783noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5179795275664264195.post-66390965402011612752012-03-31T04:56:38.768+01:002012-03-31T04:56:38.768+01:00I really like the way you always have a motif and ...I really like the way you always have a motif and draw it out the way you do. It's a very surreal way to look at the world and I think it's a wonderful gift that you have.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16518183823230864763noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5179795275664264195.post-71046908649178566932012-03-31T02:18:27.527+01:002012-03-31T02:18:27.527+01:00A life full of sadness and tragedy, and in the end...A life full of sadness and tragedy, and in the end not very remarkable. I got the impression that he *was* his shadow, sometimes sharply defined in the strong light of joy, more often blurred in the dreary overcast of solitude and a grief never really resolved.<br /><br />See, you've even got me making poetic comments!Larry Kollarhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08317037795075278427noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5179795275664264195.post-21802743110368796372012-03-31T00:07:00.100+01:002012-03-31T00:07:00.100+01:00Poetic with seamless flow, i thoroughly enjoyed th...Poetic with seamless flow, i thoroughly enjoyed this piece.liminalfictionhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08762010680878316253noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5179795275664264195.post-54019269412249493272012-03-30T23:39:19.644+01:002012-03-30T23:39:19.644+01:00Fascinating the way a life can be lived 'withi...Fascinating the way a life can be lived 'within the lines' (remember colouring in at school?) I loved the contrast between the line drawing and the silhouette. Beautiful use of imagery.Icy Sedgwickhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11501193571425442406noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5179795275664264195.post-27617461846208861302012-03-30T22:24:22.481+01:002012-03-30T22:24:22.481+01:00Well now I'm depressed.
Seriously nice stuff....Well now I'm depressed.<br /><br />Seriously nice stuff. You built a deep personality with few words.<br /><br />This is my favorite part: "He looked around at the rest of the lounge furniture. Tried to recall which had been his wife's favourite roosting place. He concluded that she never possessed one, not because she was snatched from life prematurely, rather that she was always on the move. Always fussing and servicing him."Matt Merritthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02731741347561501172noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5179795275664264195.post-68424033080619751322012-03-30T21:43:42.770+01:002012-03-30T21:43:42.770+01:00Beautiful and poetic writing. Great imagery. As a ...Beautiful and poetic writing. Great imagery. As a visual learner, I really like this.Tim VanSant Writeshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17614259042362664840noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5179795275664264195.post-20509106110971085982012-03-30T15:54:36.949+01:002012-03-30T15:54:36.949+01:00I loved the way you kept coming back to the quite ...I loved the way you kept coming back to the quite literal impression he left on the world. I really enjoyed this.Cat Russellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14160039271069426174noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5179795275664264195.post-76613756765061420192012-03-30T15:54:22.787+01:002012-03-30T15:54:22.787+01:00I loved the way you kept coming back to the quite ...I loved the way you kept coming back to the quite literal impression he left on the world. I really enjoyed this.Cat Russellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14160039271069426174noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5179795275664264195.post-28626992311403665292012-03-30T12:43:21.750+01:002012-03-30T12:43:21.750+01:00Your ability to find stunning, stark and evocative...Your ability to find stunning, stark and evocative imagery always amazes me. I love dropping in to read your poetic prose, your expansive vocabulary and precise control of language.<br />Adam B @revhappinessAdam Bhttp://afullnessinbrevity.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5179795275664264195.post-68675494283968397612012-03-30T12:15:19.676+01:002012-03-30T12:15:19.676+01:00I found the saddest - and starkest - part the bit ...I found the saddest - and starkest - part the bit where he tries to "spoon" the chalk outline. So often we take our partners for granted until their gone, and then we desperately cling on to the shreds of whatever remains.Lihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08831231531918915804noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5179795275664264195.post-41238433361350313652012-03-30T10:21:46.385+01:002012-03-30T10:21:46.385+01:00ha thanks Alison. It's funny about dialogue. I...ha thanks Alison. It's funny about dialogue. I'm kind of 'over' dialogue from my playwriting days. I do use it though sparingly in my novels, but you're right, it rarely crops up in my flash. I shall have to go away and think about that.<br /><br />marcSulci Collectivehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03293833259808943096noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5179795275664264195.post-52196913718908854912012-03-30T10:13:13.112+01:002012-03-30T10:13:13.112+01:00If this is a love story then it's love of life...If this is a love story then it's love of life itself in it's counterpoint to death and then all your stories and the fact you write at all is an act of love. <br /><br />This is so steeped with all sorts of moving resonances as he moves through life, the outline metaphor so powerful, touching on big big themes (our seperateness in life from each other, despite love), our self-awareness through life, memory and how it sharpens and deepens later experiences. Gosh where do I stop. Your writing is a still pool with a large and lovely stone dropped in. <br /><br />This is wonderful, even if it's not exactly what I meant when I entreated you to write a love story. The only thing I will say is that I miss dialogue a bit to bring the people alive, it might be possible to use the outline theme interestingly through the words they might say to each other.Alison Wellshttp://www.alisonwells.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5179795275664264195.post-80618804918754149992012-03-30T08:46:49.905+01:002012-03-30T08:46:49.905+01:00This was so sad, yet full of feeling. I could in t...This was so sad, yet full of feeling. I could in the end feel his pain, see him sitting there, his life had lost it's meaning for him.<br /><br />You write so wonderfully, Marc, so beyond what I can accomplish, your words are like poetry, their rhythm dances upon the lips of the reader.Helen A. Howellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12748128819820230841noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5179795275664264195.post-76145329504903781102012-03-30T08:45:52.883+01:002012-03-30T08:45:52.883+01:00"A moraine of pared skin, the glacial pace of..."A moraine of pared skin, the glacial pace of his unpeeling."<br />I think this is my favourite line in what is a beautifully constructed and deeply poetic piece. There are so many great lines though, and you knit the whole together with the references to drawing and outlines. It is, I think, rather wonderful.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5179795275664264195.post-62211887660112905792012-03-30T02:33:40.747+01:002012-03-30T02:33:40.747+01:00Sad story.
What did he accomplish?
To say that lov...Sad story.<br />What did he accomplish?<br />To say that love is all there is sounds trite these days, but I think it gives life meaning.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.com